Imperial Hero International
General Category => Bugs => Texts => Topic started by: DangerRanger on August 01, 2009, 07:29:44 AM
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A couple of word choice and grammatical issues would make the following sentences read a bit better:
Quest #1 Imperial City is making major reconstructions of several of its strategic military bases in Wondrous Caves. The army has requested additional 7 amount of Topaz. And, of course, they need those materials yesterday. The reward is good, if you lay a hand.
Should read: Imperial City is making major renovations to several of its strategic military bases in Wondrous Caves. The army has requested an additional 7 Topaz Gems. And, of course, they need those materials yesterday. The reward is good, if you lend a hand.
Quest #2: I hear you have a reputation of descent crafter. Let me tell you something, my friend. Words don’t impress me. Deeds do. So, if you are as half good as they say, it won’t be a problem for you to make me 5 of Crude Opal Ring, right? Now get to work and get back to me when you’re done.
Should be: I hear you have a reputation of a decent crafter. Let me tell you something, my friend; words don’t impress me, deeds do. So, if you are half good as they say, it won’t be a problem for you to make me 5 of Crude Opal Ring, right? Now get to work and get back to me when you’re done.
All the best,
DR
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A couple of word choice and grammatical issues would make the following sentences read a bit better:
Quest #1 Imperial City is making major reconstructions of several of its strategic military bases in Wondrous Caves. The army has requested additional 7 amount of Topaz. And, of course, they need those materials yesterday. The reward is good, if you lay a hand.
Should read: Imperial City is making major renovations to several of its strategic military bases in Wondrous Caves. The army has requested an additional 7 Topaz Gems. And, of course, they need those materials yesterday. The reward is good, if you lend a hand.
Quest #2: I hear you have a reputation of descent crafter. Let me tell you something, my friend. Words don’t impress me. Deeds do. So, if you are as half good as they say, it won’t be a problem for you to make me 5 of Crude Opal Ring, right? Now get to work and get back to me when you’re done.
Should be: I hear you have a reputation of a decent crafter. Let me tell you something, my friend; words don’t impress me, deeds do. So, if you are half good as they say, it won’t be a problem for you to make me 5 of Crude Opal Ring, right? Now get to work and get back to me when you’re done.
All the best,
DR
Thanx, fixed.
Regrettably, I cant's fix Topaz Gems, because the system generates the quantity, by choosing the item from the data-base. And the name of the item is static.